The event to my story, Lunch-Box Dream, is when the whole family has to take a trip to Florida. That's where their grandma lives( she's staying with them and they half to bring her back home).
The Cause of them actually driving all the way to Florida is because, they are going to stop at a battle ground site. The effect of the event is that the younger brother Bobby likes Battles and war and that is why they are going.
good job of showing the cause and effect in this piece. Although, you could of added more sentences to show the cause and effect. Overall, I would score this in the 8 and 8.5 range.
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